Very late morning. You and Carol had your teeth cleaned, then next door from the office you bought Kidd's ice tea. Home for Carol to change shoes and presently you are in the north lot backed into the shade of tall trees thinking about the peanut butter and saltless soda crackers you about to partake for a snack and wash down with the tea. - Amorella
Wow. Your paragraph is on the Fleschman-Kincaid 12th grade level. Who would have thought.
You are really going left-brain commando on me, orndorff. You have both grammar and spelling working. While you are at it notice the Flesch Reading Ease score for that paragraph is 100%. The reading ease is going to be more important than the grade level score. We will note that level at the end of each chapter along with the word count. Then we will convert the chapters, by chapter, to your Apple Pages software for further scrutiny as we go along. Each chapter final draft will be the final draft. You got that, boy? - Amorella
What about the transitions from chapter to chapter? I wasn't thinking about this stuff, Amorella.
Each transition will follow with the chapter leading it, just as the introduction, etc. works with the first chapter. Think back to your early literary oriented projects as a kid. First, color in the lines of a 'to color' page perfectly as possible; then when older, use Dad's old Underwood typewriter to make up stories about specific letters, such a 'B' to become living characters -- B had a child b whose father was X -- that sort of thing; then drawing comic strips with captions to tell a story (usually science fiction) with three or four strips making a unit. This was between the ages of three and seven. The point is this is going to be the culmination of your writing life, the best you can do while in your seventies. This is what you want, isn't it? - Amorella
I hadn't thought of it as specifically as you are saying, but yes, that is my thought, the best I can do (I was going to say "before I die") but your thought is better, "in my seventies". I like that better; it gives me hope to live longer, that is, to create some added value for myself.
Lifelong thinking, leads the way, boy. This is a life long trilogy you are creating for yourself and I am happy to be a part of it. - Amorella.
Are you going to work (creatively) as the right-brain, while I work as the left-brain?
We two are as a "conductor" of words, boy. We both use both sides of the brain down into the brainstem if we have to make the words flow well. You see here, that you are creating a list of objectives and goals for this trilogy. The instructor part is built in from experience, boy.- Amorella
I guess it is. But I am not teaching anything. I don't have a curriculum to follow. Really, I would be uncomfortable telling a story to teach something. I am no Aesop, nor do I have any desire to be.
During all those years of teaching curriculum you tried to help your young students along with their lives also. Many of your stories were life stories, grandpa or old uncle stories you would pass on to the young from your experiences in living. Besides, if you want to give a lesson along the way it can be to "learn to express yourself, to communicate well with others through grammar and reasoning. Show, not tell, boy. Isn't that the mantra? - Amorella
1218 hours. I hadn't thought of it like that, Amorella.
1447 hours. We had lunch at a new place for us, James Third Base, a sports bar with a delicious "Cleveland-like" menu (think Brennan's Colony Bar and Grill). On the northwest corner of Reading Road (Rt.42) and Western Row, catty-cornered from Key Bank and Skyline Chili. We are very pleasantly surprised and told the owner, Jim, we would be back.
All well and good, boy, but we need to get cracking on the section transition. - Amorella
1730 hours. I have been working on a transition poem of sorts. I want to say enough but not too much. It is difficult to pen down.
You have the wit to throw in a rather prickly pun so there's creative energy. Copy what you have at present, in bold only. I will eliminate some lines then you work with what's left. - Amorella
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"What's Left" (thought out of order)
Books in their Bindings, Chapters In Four Section Limits
The Dead, The Brothers, Grandma and Young Diplomat's Pouch
All Four are Thought Balls on the Table Racking Up Points
In Grammar and Reason and when Time's Out of Joint
Location, Location is a stacked book in a Place
No need for Distance when Nothing is Space
Merlyn's in a Bind, Bound in a Soul Bounded Case
With No Accounting for Tongue, No Accounting for Taste
Page turning Page Racking Forward or Back,
Thought Balls on the Table Pocketing Tracks
What the Meaning, the Purpose in Ball Running Points
With Grammar in Reason, and Time Out of Joint?
With Merlyn Stuck Alone in a Thought Board Box
Only the Free Mind of Merlyn Can Open the Lock
Of the Dead and Brothers, Grandma and Pouch
Of the Living, and Brothers, Grandma and Pouch
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