02 July 2013

Notes - message received / C and R waiting / raw re-draft for Grandma 19


        Mid-morning. You are back from filling up the storage container with two gallons of gas and are awaiting a dryer grass to mow though presently it appears that it might rain again. - Amorella


        1017 hours. There is a fifty percent chance of rain today according to some weather authorities. We had good rains last night and vegetation is growing gangbusters, like we are still in May. The August issue of Car and Driver puts the Ford and Accord plug-ins against one another and the Ford wins. The actual mileage on a C/D 500 mile trip is 41 for the Ford and 42 for the Honda with the Ford way out front with "fun to drive". It makes me re-think the Camry standard hybrid, which appears is going to be far cheaper than the standard hybrids for both Ford and Honda. I don't like investing in unknowns and that brings up your latest conjecturing in reference to the soul in yesterday's blog.

         I don't see the importance of the soul in the books. I like the concept and that may be the problem. Just because I like something doesn't mean it is going to be good for the story. What would the soul need a 'backbone of humanity' for? Is this an evolutionary theoretical? I can't see a real purpose for the story. I have added enough already to weaken the whole structure. In some ways the blog and Merlyn books are just vehicles for putting thoughts down like chess pieces, it is a game to pass the time. There is nothing wrong with this as far as I can see, but the expensive energy to put up such a facade is rather silly when it serves as a general container for thoughts displaced from mind to letters.

       Message received, orndorff. You needed to put this down for the record. Post. - Amorella


         1808 hours. I mowed most of the yard (except hills which Carol mowed). We split a Subway turkey and ham for lunch and I did my exercises both yesterday and today. The shoulder is feeling much better but still not up to par. I wasted the afternoon reading "Car and Driver" and wondering about what kind of car we really need -- economically, practically and for comfortable on both short and longer trips. The Camry Hybrid is looking more reasonable at present. This car business is a fun waste of energy. I will eventually use all this research and consideration (as will Carol).

         Criteria and Renaldo are waiting for the pleasure of your company sometime this evening. Later, dude. Post. - Amorella


         2156 hours. We watched two shows, last night's "King and Maxwell" and "Major Crimes", then, I watched "Under the Dome". Why don't they write to one another since the dome is transparent? They have more than enough characters to switch and bait at the conclusion of each episode. This is what they appear to be doing. What else is new?

         Let's go to Grandma 19 and see what happens. - Amorella

         2233 hours. I have slashed words with only a notions of what to do with the 754, but here they are as raw data for rebuilding Grandma 19.

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Grandma 19 (a basic re-draft)

            Renaldo opened his eyes to see a squirt of fire left.

            “Hello, I mean you no harm. “My name is Criteria. I am from Athens to attend the festival at Santiago de Compostela.

            Renaldo replies, “An unusual name. I am Renaldo a student also traveling to the Way of Saint James. The brother of our Christ has his bones revered at such a site.”

Criteria glanced, "Are you an artistic priest?"

“I have worked leading and setting blue stained glass into several Church windows. I have also carved simple oak crosses.”

“Do you travel this road to escape Fate?” say I.

Renaldo stared into the flames. People in this country hold their philosophies private.

Criteria smiled broadly. “You are a student,” and pointed to his two leather bound books. “I am learned also.”

“That I am," Renaldo smiled, “at Toledo. I have with me Aristotle and Pythagoras.”

“I know them both.”

“I have thought on those words myself,” replied Renaldo.

“How can you belong to yourself and not belong to yourself at the same time?” responded Criteria.

“You are a woman,” stated Renaldo bluntly. “How could you read? How are you here?” He said, “You are Greek.”

“I was schooled in the philosophies.

Renaldo asked, “What is in that leather pouch that is belted at your waist?”

Criteria motioned to sit. She opened the pouch and pulled out a human skull. “I carry this to remind me of what I will be one day.”

“Are you truly a woman?”

“Are you truly a man?”

Criteria said, “We need to get on our way.”

            The two quietly continued for two miles on the open and nearly empty road towards the city of Santiago de Compostela on the west coast of northern Spain.

She could pass for a Frank rather than a Greek. He said, “I have heard stories the Dead walk this way every night.”

            “I too. That is the reason I crept in and curled up by your fire. I am afraid of the Dead.”

            “If I see one of the Dead I will bless him. Only tormented spirits would walk this road.”

            How did you come to be here from as far away as Athens?”

            Criteria laughed for the first time, “I sail. I would rather walk at my own pace than ride a horse.

            Renaldo’s quiet, simple smile returned. “What is the reputation?”

            “I am Ostrogoth, converted to Arian Christianity. My uncle is Theodoric. Father wanted another son but got me instead. I am a better son than any of my younger brothers.”

            “Ostrogoth,” he said in surprise. “I am Visigoth.

            Criteria stopped. “Here we are on the same path, heading to the bones of St. James the Elder, the brother of Jesus.”

For the first time since he could remember, his books became secondary. This woman is real, he thought. 

            Later that evening they found an inn in which to eat and stay. Two men for a room as far as the innkeeper knew.

            Morning rose late and so did they. “We have to sell the horse,” said Criteria.

            “What church will you donate the money to?” asked Renaldo.

            “The church of two pilgrims.”

            “Where is that?” he asked.

            “In Rome,” she replied.

            Renaldo stood dumbfounded. “Rome?”

            “I am leaving for Rome by boat. You are coming with me to deliver the money.”
           
            Criteria said “Up on the horse,” she said. “We travel together to Rome. I will pay your way home if you wish to return. You are a student of books. You need to be a student of the world. How much better then will you receive your flock.”

            He climbed on the back of the horse. “I forgot my books,” he said, “I have never forgotten my books in my life.”

            “I have them in a leather bag,” replied Criteria. “Let’s sell this horse, and be gone to Rome.” Then Greece, she thought, but decided he could hear that later.

*
            Criteria and Renaldo stopped first in Marseilles.

So together it comes three divisions in one
Today, a Past, and a Future is spun;
One by one through Chapter Twenty-one to deliver
A slow march of freed words from across the River.

Words delivered by Ferryboat Captain, Leo Lamar
From the dead of humanity tilting the Living ajar;
Filtering through humankind like a somber dew

Through a body of friendship, from Grandma to you,
From smiling Grandma's white teeth and black gums
Merlyn’s mind in a Future this way comes.

[754 words to re-begin with from the original 6817 words]

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         This will be a different story orndorff. You had little choice but to delete. This is much easier for us to re-work. Post. - Amorella

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