You
are a bit somber this morning while thinking on the apparent suicide of Lee
Thompson Young who played Lieutenant Berry Frost on "Rizzoli and
Iles". Carol is off to breakfast with Ann and other retired Blue Ash
teacher friends. Lunch with Jim and Jeanne today. - Amorella
0836
hours. It is going to be a good day. It is sad some people choose to leave this
planetary system early - each human being has herorhis own reasons for such a
path. My best to each one, and all. - rho
Upon reading you think this sounds rather irreverent
but there is a simple sincerity and truth behind your comment, boy. Now, let it go. Post. -Amorella
Mid-afternoon. You
are at Pine Hill Lakes Park far north lot facing west at the hill. There is
almost continual thunder to the southeast with the wind out of the north. You
had a good long and a series of interesting conversations at lunch with Jim and
Jeanne at Panera before they left to return to Dayton for the night and to
Atlanta tomorrow. The plan is to stop in and see them on the way back from
Florida in either November or December. Carol is on page 301 of Sandra Brown's Lethal
at present. Let's work on Grandma 21 dropping the heart of what appears
important in the original draft from Braided Dreams. - Amorella
1608
hours. I just looked over the first page and have no idea, no criteria to draw
from. How do you drop the heart from a story?
This is practice at reading the story from
the soul's perspective. Facts are basically meaningless and since this is
fiction that makes this simpler. - Amorella
But
facts and details within the story build setting, tone and credibility for the
reader.
We will rebuild this from the soul's bones
of the story draft. I will help you. Bold rather than delete until you get the
hang of it. - Amorella
1622
hours. I have done a lot of bolding.
Erase the bolding. - Amorella
But
it is so much.
Clutter to a soul, mostly clutter, nonsense
in importance. Why
is it so difficult for human beings to let go of matters of so little
importance? - Amorella
I
will make a copy of the bolded notes and delete from that copy. I will keep the
bolded notes for evidence.
Evidence of what? - Amorella
Evidence
of the humanity in the story.
How do you know what is being cut is the
humanity of the story? - Amorella
Because
it appears there is. There are nuances and intent and interest in the
development of the story. Well, that's the idea anyway. (1628)
Make your copy and see what is left, what
the soul is interested in. - Amorella
1637
hours. I am left with 498 words.
Set them in the notes and post when you
return home. - Amorella
I
don't think they'll make sense.
Now, as far as the books and notes go, you
will better understand how it is to be a soul. - Amorella
I
think you are just making this up as you go along. - Amorella.
Do you see any evidence of this in books and
blog? - Amorella
Not
really. I mean it is making sense to me. (1641)
Then you'll have to contend with that while
reading the soul's, your soul's shredding of the segment Grandma 21. All
for now, boy. Post this when it is convenient. - Amorella.
***
***
What the
Soul sees as Important
in the
original Grandma 21 drafting
This
is what is coming up. Criteria and Renaldo.
Criteria and Renaldo are
about to witness a magician like no other in their lifetime. Merlyn the Bard
will look into their eyes, and they will see a quick glimpse of how it is to be
a shaman in a mind dance.
“Today we may meet Merlyn,” announced
Renaldo, “if he is at the stones as we’ve been told,
Merlyn’s
ears cocked at the sound of two horses with riders covering the distance behind
him.
Criteria and Renaldo slowed their horses
when they spied the walking man ahead on the right. “I wonder if that him,”
said Renaldo. “He looks the part.”
“Tall, slender with wild reddish hair and
those ridiculous gray trousers. From here they look to be a hundred years old.”
Finally, Criteria shouted, “Would you
like a ride?”
To which Merlyn replied, still in stride,
“I have two legs, no need of four more.”
“What bee the pleasure, m’Lady?” said he.
Criteria
held her tongue but her face and body language told old Merlyn all he needed to
know. “I understand,” she said quietly. “Your stones sometimes turn on their
own. Are they any truths to those dancing stones heard in the Rhineland?”
Merlyn
laughed in gumption at her turnaround. “Celt stones dance with Celt feet under
them.
Criteria
looked at him directly and he stared back with twice the directlness in his
honest lids. She felt herself soften. “Thank you, Merlyn. I shall keep that in
mind.” She signaled Renaldo to come forward, now that her private conversation
was complete.
“What
do you have in mind?” asked Renaldo.
“I
think he’s a warrior not a scholar,” said Criteria. “You finish setting all
this up and I’ll mingle and see if I can find out anything of interest along
that line.”
“Merlyn
never tells the same tale twice,” said Morgause, “that is the reason people are
excited to have him here.”
“He
leaves this world,” noted Viviane. “Merlyn leaves this world. No one knows
where he speaks from, but it is not from here.”
Merlyn
stopped frozen in place. No one moved. Hearts stopped. Bodies followed and in
trance began to dance. Mind alone. Only Merlyn could do that. Hold the mind
with words spoken or read. His voice moved up two octaves.
Suddenly Merlyn’s eyes rolled from his
head to focus on the Living. “That was my first story,” he said, “There is a
second. It is a story that until now, only the Dead were conscious of.”
Merlyn
paused. His eyes rolled back into the top of his head.
In these books Grandma has
the gift of gab,
For Merlyn’s crystal to send
this private confab;
The Dead speak short, the
Dead speak true,
The fiction my earthy child
is set in you.
Each reader may
write a storybook someday
When she is old
and when he is gray;
Grandma Earth in
Merlyn makes old stories new
With Friendly
the Marsupial and Soki too.
***
498 words
*** ***
1812 hours. Using words automatic
summary the 498 words is about 4.5 percent of the total 11318 words of the
original Merlyn's Mind manuscript of Grandma 21. Using just the math 4.5
percent of 11318 averages to 509 words so it is close enough to the number of
words in the soul's 'bare bones'.
This is cultural mathematics, boy. Later,
dude. - Amorella
You each had a make your own snack supper,
watched the news and then the BBC thriller, "Broadchurch" which is on
every Wednesday night. You just saw the third episode of eight and you both are
hooked on the series. What we have to work with in Grandma's 21 are the 498
words. - Amorella
2029
hours. So this the way it is going to be? Every segment of the original book
two, Running Through. I
haven't thought about book two for years. I recollect a love affair in the
Grandma Stories and Diplomat being born (earth mother and marsupial humanoid
father). The conception bed, so to speak, was a mistake in a Petri dish. I
can't remember much about the Brothers. I have never been able to recollect
lines I have written. What would be the purpose of keeping them in my head?
Hypothetically, what happens when you're
dead? - Amorella
In
a Merlyn books environment I would 'know' I wrote the books. If someone were to
ask, 'What are the books about?' I would say, 'the books are about my imaginary
life'. In real life I was married and we had one daughter and she got married
and she and her husband had two boys, our grandchildren. My partner and I were
teachers in life, upper elementary and senior high.' That is probably about as
far as I could go on my own. It is as far as I would want to go. Things that I
love, the sciences and philosophy would make little difference, as there would
be little to relate to. There would be no weather to speak of and unless you
were with old friends and family there would be nothing much to talk about or
recollect. Now, if I could go about an meet people with different experiences
and who had lived in different time periods. That would be interesting. One
could learn from others' experiences. Being Dead could still be an enjoyable
experience where a broader sense personal consciousness is gained. Beyond that,
not much. The challenge would be to keep learning things that you could relate to.
That's how I see it. Mostly though, I think it would be a quiet time with old
friends and new ones from along the way. Everyone dead (even if there were real
aliens) could relate to the 'human' spirit. There would be plenty to discuss if
one had the notion to do so. I have always been an observer, that's my comfort
zone. I imagine I would still enjoy observing quietly most of the time. I
rather got carried away here. (2101)
I asked the question. You gave an honest
spontaneous response. - Amorella
2104
hours. I just had the thought that the philosophy that might be discussed among
the Dead is, 'What happens [to us] next?' I can't imagine we would just
stagnate. That is not what the human spirit is about. I would like to imagine
we would continue creating our own light both as individuals and as a grand
community of spirits. We would be what we are now. We would continue what we
are now. (2108)
Let's stop here for the night. Tomorrow we
can put some meat in those bones of Grandma 21. Later, gator. - Amorella
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