16 October 2015

Notes - correctable error / comic idea / Stats on 10 / Ch. 10 corrected

         Late afternoon. You both walked this morning. You have one and eight tens miles so far today with a mile and two-tenths at the park itself. Thirty minutes for that exercise each day, the rest of the iPhone mileage accumulates with errands and chores about the day with the phone in your pocket. – Amorella

         1641 hours. I am about to do my stats for chapter ten and realize that I have to cut 167 words out because I went over with the additional added poetry. I’ll delete what is needed and finish the stats to drop in today’s post – no big deal.

         Last night you read more on how to set up and work the Comics app and to further simplify the Merlyn books with humor and wit – a graphic comic novel approach – as something with less thought involved – just as an entertainment. The reason behind this is that comic graphics gives you a new laid back format about something you already have a background. – Amorella

         1651 hours. I would mind doing something else, that is a vehicle where I can express concepts similar to those in the books, that is, the vastness of the galaxy and visible and invisible natural connections between the Living and the Dead of us and an alien species. I like to explore this kind of stuff.

         It will take some time to work up to this. For practice, why don’t you set up a narrative where you visit the Dead, nothing literary like Virgil (Aeneid) and Dante (The Divine Comedy). – Amorella

         1710 hours. You mean I invent a sort of time machine apparatus that allows me to visit the dead.

         Why not, it’s a comic book. – Amorella

         1711 hours. It brings a smile. I’m conjuring up something that puts me in a two-dimensional state where I can partially visit but not the deeper one-dimensional state. That sounds like fun.

         It’ll give you time to learn and practice some comic graphic skills. Create a fun comic caricature of yourself from a photograph or two. – Amorella

         1716 hours. It is not much trouble making fun of myself – I have plenty of weaknesses.

         So does everybody, boy. Post. - Amorella


         2228 hours. I have the stats for chapter ten.
** **
Ch. 10  Roundabout Reel
Words - 3089
Sentences - 239
Words per Sentence – 12.0
Sentences/Paragraph – 2.2
Passive Sentences – 2%
Flesh Reading Ease - 100.0
Flesh-Kincaid Grade Level – 0.8
** **
         You also made some minor changes, which will have to be shown on the iCloud Page format. After a Subway lunch you and Carol later had a snack supper while watching NBC News, “Bones”, a “Modern Family” and “Mysteries of Laura”. Carol is up reading and you are about ready for bed yourself. – Amorella

         2236 hours. It does feel good to have chapter ten out of the road for the time being. I am ready to kick in with chapter eleven. The Stats help. Grammar errors are found and corrected or sometimes ignored. I like that the Flesh Reading Ease is 100 percent. I am still not sure that the Flesh-Kincaid Grade Level is helpful. I know that the challenge, or one of them anyway, is that the reader has to correlate the four segments in each chapter, plus continue this correlation through all the chapters if she or he wants to ‘feel’ the dream segments as Merlyn sees them. I think it must be easier for Merlyn to do this being dead. I don’t know that anyone Living might reasonably dream like this. For me though, this reading comprehension challenge to the novels has an authenticity to it. I like to stretch minds, my own included. I would never ask readers or students to do something I myself cannot do. The minds that understand these books have to grow into them. That’s the point. They are a human being’s dreams. A human being can put the human puzzle together if she or he works on it.

         People have other important things to do, boy. You know that. You hope people can see and make their own discoveries by reading, just as you have your entire life. Learning about one’s self is fun and the learning can be applied to others too, it is not just about being human, it is about being in the human family and the responsibilities that come with it. You know this. Post. - Amorella

         Here is the revised and corrected for now now Chapter Ten.

** **



TEN   ©2015, rho, GMG.2
Roundabout Reel

            The Supervisor has a little saying:
                                    Ring-a-ring o'rosies
                                    A pocket full of posies
                                    "A-tishoo! A-tishoo!"
                                    We all fall down!

                                    We rise from clay
                                    On judgment day
                                    Be we dead or still alive.

        

The Dead 10

                                   Wing-dancing spritely across leafy forest
                                    Feather bright birds sing along in a chorus,
                                    Dead trees' gray fingers will leaf out quite soon
                                    Under misty full light of magic May Moon.
.
            Merlyn lies comfortably as a stone sarcophagus on the top of the granite-like mountain separating him from the Earthling Dead. There is a difference up here in my sanctuary from down by my hut and stream, he thinks. There is a residual effect, an echo of sorts from life that may stay awhile in one or more of the person’s most intimate surroundings. It is a place that most of the Living at one time or another get the tincture of a haunting when the ghostly spirit as it were, is no longer there or perhaps never was there consciously. That’s my observation that has no more validity than I do. Such a lace of humor to drape me this side of the River; a dark humor that forever sparks my humanity to survive beyond physical death. Humor, to my spirit, is everywhere, a delight like a spring valley of fresh flowerings. All one has to do on either side of the River is to observe one’s surroundings. With this, Merlyn flashes above his sleepy stone-like head to the Supervisor’s saying in parchment-woven heartanmind:

                                   Ring-a-ring o'rosies
                                    A pocket full of posies
                                    "A-tishoo! A-tishoo!"
                                    We all fall down!

                                    We rise from clay
                                    On judgment day
                                    Be we dead or still alive.

            These are the first words from the other side, and from our Supervisor’s gleaned intelligence, no less. No tunnel or flash of light for me; nothing more than the presence of words hanging in the dark – “We rise from clay, this judgment day.” And, the surrounding dark strangely resounds in a chorus every so quietly, “Be we dead and still alive.” The words haunt as an apparition might flow among the Living – an invisible sheet of an undiscoverable yet understood reality. We are born already dead, that’s how I see it. I do not know the words, the vocabulary to grasp the sense. Life is but a moment where we have need of great calculation. I see this now. Without time, the closet of the open soul speaks:
.
            - I, an open soul, am a fully immersed constant observing out three hundred and sixty degrees Up and Down and All Around. I am a poetic breath without the air. Open mouthed, I forage with kindness for a mutually beneficial sustenance searching to shelter an unprotected heartanmind that I might learn more examples of what life is. –

            Turn. Turn. Turn and Turn again.
            - Merlyn’s soul, Foretoken, asks, why are you here?
            - The once open soul, Venerable, answers, to learn. –
            - What else can be digested from Merlyn’s heartanmind? –
             - Venerable replies, a weakness needs shoring up.
            Another Turn sets open and then it is closed for the better.
.
            Merlyn grumbles. What is this that moves my soul away from this place to another as another soul flies down to nest – Here. I feel a surrounding movement where there is none. I feel as a chess piece picked up and dropped on an adjacent square. I am the same Druid piece I was and not a Bishop. I appear alone on this Board but I know better. The Supervisor is about. I am who I am – Merlyn a Master Druid and once Scottish Bard. I lie on the top of Granite Mountain in my own sanctuary. I look down to the Dead and up to the Living. Stone of the Spirit is my architecture. I am a common heartansoulanmind. I am free to defy, as are all other human-like spirits. I lie here in balance with Up, Down, and All Around. I am and I am not, both at once.
            Silence.
            Humbly, I exist without being. I have no voice, no sound, no spiritual sense at all other than an invisible crosshair. Being without being. There is no beginning or end to it. Naked, and consciously aware, I defy my very self’s center to remember what a Master Druid is.
.
                          Beware Earthly air, whirling winds deceive
                        Beware the claw-ripped Souls of Beltane's Eve.






The Brothers 10

                        Tonight come the birds dressed wild and black
                        So keep close your Soul, they'll be wanting to hack
.
Richard sits in his favorite stuffed jungle print green chair staring out the front window at the naked trees. A dusting of snow coats the ground but the crevices and crannies where the major limbs jutted out from the tree trunks. We are comfortably retired. Writing takes up a good amount of my time. I share my work with my brother and friends. I am content with that. I have no regrets. He smiles, ‘If I knew I were going to die tomorrow, tonight I would order a large Papa John pizza with the works.’
.

The next afternoon Connie and Cindy are each reading a different Dick Francis novel, drinking green tea and having a homemade scone hot out of the oven. Connie leans back in her chair, opened the basement door and shouts, “What’s going on down there?”
“Nothing,” answers Richard still laughing, “We were taking about logical fallacies.”
“Come on up, we just took some scones from the oven.”
The laughter subsided as the twins climb the steps. “What kind?”
“Blueberry.”
“They’re pretty good,” comments Cyndi. “I haven’t made these before.”
“Rob, what was so funny,” asks Connie.
“Richie has this crazy idea about his book. In order to keep it honest he lets Merlyn come into the dream.”
“What dream is that?” questions Cyndi.
“She doesn’t read the books,” says Richard with a smile.
            “I don’t read your books either,” says Connie. In unison the comment, “We like our mysteries.”
            “Merlyn’s dreaming four lucid dreams at the same time,” notes Robert eager to see where the conversation will go.
            “I have had one or two lucid dream in my life,” says Cyndi. “They are in color aren’t they?”
            Richard notes, “The focus of the dream is realistically detailed and the dreamer realizing he is dreaming, enters the dream and attempts to control it.”
            “You can’t control your dreams. What would be the point of that?” questions Connie.
            “We were in one together once. We both had the same dream,” says Cyndi, “Don’t you remember?”
            “We both dreamed we were fishing with Grandma in his boat and we both caught the same fish.”
            “It was a four pound small mouth bass,” says Cindy.
            Watching Robert shrugging his shoulders, Richard comments, “I didn’t know that. Why didn’t you ever tell us? That’s pretty cool.”
            “How old were you?” says Robert.
            “I was thirteen and she was fourteen.”
            The four laugh.
            “If Merlyn is dreaming the stories and you take Merlyn out, then you can’t have the dreams. You have to have a dreamer to have a dream,” suggests Cyndi matter-of-factly.
            “I know that,” snips Richard.
            “Then you have to leave Merlyn in,” responds Connie. “He’s in the first book too, isn’t he?” Connie glances at Robert’s I-told-you-so look and adds, “If Merlyn performs mental surgery to get into the dream, what is wrong with that? He must have felt compelled to enter his dream. If I were going to enter a dream of my own, I would want to do or change something. What are you having Merlyn do or change?”
            Richard sits amazed afraid to smile, shake his head or even glance at Robert.
            “And, how does Merlyn get back out after he goes in?” asks Cyndi. “You have to give the reader a reason as to why people do what they do. Otherwise, why put Merlyn in the story in the first place?”
            Connie spies Richard’s wry grimace and comments, “We caught the fish. When we were in our dreams we each caught a fish. We were in the twin dream to catch a fish.”
            Cyndi smiles in delight, saying, “It just happened to be the same one – the same fish, the small mouth bass.”
            Taking advantage of the humor being presented, Connie adds, “We can be independent when we are together, just like you two.”
            “We know,” comment Robert and Richard.
            “And, we are not even twins.”
            “Really, who would have guessed,” says her husband quickly while rolling his eyes up at his brother.
.
            A little later when they are in the living room, Richard asks, “I didn’t know how to dance around that conversation. What was it about?”
            “I think we were confused,” gleans Robert.
            “What did Merlyn having a lucid dream have to do with fish?”
            “They don’t care to know your books, Richie.”
            “It’s just as well.”
            “Connie brought up a good question though. Why would Merlyn want to change a dream? Which chapter? Which segment?”
            Richard sits perplexed. “I wanted him to change something for the drama of it.”
            “Dreams should be what they are. If you consciously change them they are fraudulent.”
            “Your right, Rob. We have to keep this honest.”
.

And fly it to Mounds where years seem a day
Across the far green where Fairy lands lay.





Grandma 10

Be strong like the Oak near Celtic crossed stone
Think deep in Druid’s sleep so Spirits can roam,
.
It is the afternoon of Mid-Summer’s Eve in 1307. Mark’s mother, Lady Nelleke and Moira’s mother, Lady Anne are out pleasure riding their Icelandic horses, a chestnut and a grey leaving their children with the pretty maid servant, Margaret.
 Fifteen year old Mark Thomas Greystone is sitting on a veranda eyeing Margaret on her hands and knees playing with seven year Moira of Kenilworth who is pretending to be the faery queen.
            “Put Moira on the black colt,” suggests Mark.
            “Why bother,” replies Margaret. “Moira is afraid of horses. She had a fall once. The pony is here to remind her that horses can be gentle.
            While radiating her young charm Moira, notes, “We are looking for a four-leaf clover. Mark, do come and help us look.”
            Mark smiles, shakes his head sideways, and blows her a kiss.
            Moira sharply comments, “Margaret, Mark Thomas will not come help.”
            “I can get him to come down here,” winks Margaret.
            “What are you going to say?” asks Moira somewhat more innocently than she feels.
            “Master Mark,” declares Margaret teasingly, “Come down and help and if you find us a four-leaf, we will each give you a kiss on the cheek.”
            Moira stands up with the four-leaf clover she had been eyeing for sometime. “I found the magic clover,” she pronounces, “and she runs and gave it to surprised Mark Thomas. “This is for you to choose who you would rather kiss, me or Margaret.”
            Without hesitation, Mark stood unthinkingly, then bent down and replies, “I choose to kiss your hand, my Lady Moira.”

            “Margaret,” calls Mark Thomas with a wink at young Moira, “Would you care to join Lady Moira, myself, and a my treasured four-leaf clover by walking the beautiful black pony?”
            “I would, m’Lord,” grins Margaret, “should Lady Moira agree.”
            With all the smiles and warmth of the summer afternoon, what else could young Moira do but please her pretending Lord Mark Thomas one more time?

Merlyn stirred mid-dream on Grandma’s hand,
The dead man’s mind was flatland scanned,
I remember, Merlyn thought, such a time as this,
A time in childhood in a young druid’s bliss.
...

            We are in the last week of June 1307, says Grandma. This narrative settles around a private conversation between forty-four year old Lord David Montarran of Stonebridge and his lovely wife, Lady Diana de Laque, who is all of sixteen. This is his second marriage. His first wife, Lady Julia, died with child. Here is a heartfelt conversation from
            “You have ancient sympathies for Scotland, Lord David, and so do I. We French and Scots have remained close,” says Lady Diana.
            “Aye,” speaks David, “Longshanks will do them in. King Robert was excommunicated for murder in a church. The kings should not be meddling in the Church’s affairs. Both are corrupt.”
            Lady Diana smiles warmly.
            “It is old Celtic ways at work,” continues Lord David.
            “The Bishop says it is not good to doubt the faith, m’Lord,” scolds Diana.
            Lord David laughs, “I have my doubts.”
            “M’Lord,” inquires Lady Diana, “You are here. I have no doubts on that whatsoever.”
            “You are good for my soul, m’Lady,” answers old Lord David. “To have no doubts and to be honest about it at the same time is a sure sign of youth.”
            “Is it the learning you have acquired in your lifetime that brings the doubts?”
            “By the sweet saints, no, my lovely Diana. It is the errors.”
            “The Bishop says doubting is the Devil.”
            “Errors are not sins, m’Lady.”
            “I know the seven deadly sins, m’Lord David,” she notes.
            “I’ll put a king’s coin wager on it,” laughs Lord David, “but you have to balance them with the seven virtues alongside.”
            “Gambling. You love your lighthearted gambling,” she chuckles.
            He rises from his chair and whispers, “You do my heart good, and I love you as I have only loved one other.”
            “You do my young heart well too, m’Lord.”
            Lord David bends down saying aloud; “My heart is so entwined with yours that I cannot tell your heart from my own.”
            Grandma grins. Lord David loves his second wife as much as he did his first. Such as it is with two hearts exchange.
.
Love torn into equal pieces would seem a disaster,
Yet it makes the heart stronger and pumps the blood faster.
.
Bring Souls together, yet remain afar,
Make fiery bright op’ning of the Oracle’s jar




Diplomatic Pouch 10

Beware Earthly air, whirling winds deceive,
Beware the claw-ripped Souls of Beltane's Eve.
On aid-Spring night where great stones lay rounded
In Fairy light from damp bark re-bounded.

.

            Blake Williams sits uncomfortably in an easy chair in the small workstation at the StoneHouse site waiting for Friendly to return to the secret dig with medical information about Pyl and Justin. Blake’s mind ruminates on the event an hour earlier. Pyl and Justin were at the bottom of the ten-foot deep, three foot wide ditch between the ancient foundation and the thin outer safety wall at the northwest corner of StoneHouse dig when a black and red squirrel-like animal jumped into the dig landing on Justin’s right shoulder, and when Justin attempted to knock the rodent off, it bit him on the forearm. The panicked rodent’s back claws dug into Justin’s wrist as it jumped at Pyl who quickly turned to knock the animal to the dirt floor. The small furry animal also bit her on the forearm before falling. The rodent running along the ditch floor was startled to see Friendly appear ahead. She drew a small instrument from her left sleeve side pocket and fired which stunned the forest creature.
            Blake conjectures; those little rodents were trying to protect the purity and sanctity of Elderfelder from us Earthlings, that’s what these marsupial humanoids are going to say. The quick and furry little creatures remind me of chipmunks. This will add to reinforce the myth that these vermin helped Elderfelder survive. No one knew the facts in those ancient days.  Surely people today know this Elderfelder was mostly a story that it can be very much appreciated as such, but there is a can of worms in opening the story into a possible modern truth because now StoneHouse does indeed exist. How does this fit with we humans being a part of this archeological find? Why does Friendly want us here? It would be better if we were not in any way associated with this StoneHouse discovery.
            With an easy though interruptive gait Friendly walks into the room. “Pyl and Justin will be fine. They just need rest for a couple of days. They can better privately rest on Ship.”
            Still sitting Blake replies, “This puts my mind to ease.” He quickly adds, “Why did you want us to be a part of this archeological dig in the first place? It seems to me it would have been better if we were not involved in recreating your ancient mythology concerning Elderfelder.”
            Indifferently, Friendly states, “Elderfelder is a complicated legend. Many people who would otherwise know better choose to believe it.” She smiles and raises her arms out. “Ship and Onesixanzero feel it is in our interest to have Earthlings connected as a sort of ‘good luck’ – bringing a positive reinforcement for your visit. The problem is that now we may have a real Elderfelder, a babe being kept alive even though she has little brain matter. This in itself may raise the probability in peoples’ minds that the legend really was true, at least parts of it, the Elderfelder was indeed a real person. Most people are raised enjoying the legend as a story not as a fact. Things are further complicated with the reality of two Earthlings being attacked by those damn rodents. Do you see the problem?”
            “I can certainly foresee one, possibly two or three,” states Blake, who suddenly feels the need to stand. After a few minutes, he notes, “Thank you for telling me the truth straightforward.” He lets loose with a nervous laugh, “You people are no different than us. Twenty thousand years further along – but you are set up for an all too natural human dilemma. How do you bring the past up to the present so you can better deal with the future?”
            Friendly replies, “We can provide facts. At least the facts we have a present – about you Earthlings, StoneHouse and a young girl who is like Elderfelder was once described more than twenty-five thousand years ago, but people relate better to stories than to facts.”
            “People will draw connections, even the facts will become stories on their own,” suggests Blake. “I have no idea what is best.”
            Friendly comments coolly, “I was not asking you what is best for us, Dr. Williams. I am explaining our situation.”
            Friendly’s tone whispers into Blake's consciousness as the somber dance of now silent Scottish bagpipers in a fog-laden valley. I have an uneasy feeling here, thinks Blake, and he opens his Earth calendar to see the date back home – 31 October 2015.
.
Ghostly priestess and priest on Celtic cross stand
Midst Fire and Water in Sky and on Land

...



** **

No comments:

Post a Comment