04 July 2016

Notes - morning / Brothers -14 nfd / Dewdrop 8


       After noon. Carol is pretty much packed and you decided to wait until this afternoon to do your exercises. You also have six hundred and some words for Brothers – Fourteen. – Amorella

       1231 hours. Surprisingly, it is coming along. I didn’t really start until about a half hour ago. I kept thinking that Carol would be done using the bed to sort clothes.    
   
       Why didn’t you use the other bedroom? – Amorella      

       1234 hours. I didn’t want to. I’m still somewhat tired. I should have taken a nap after breakfast – but then she was working on her clothes packing. She always wants to have a proper appearance; probably because her dad was a superintendent of schools when she was young, and then overseas in the embassy . . . like a preacher’s kid always having to be well-behaved in public. Where it counts most Carol is pretty rebellious. That’s one of the things I have always loved about her.

       Post. - Amorella


       Mid-afternoon. You had the usual at Penn Station for a late lunch then ran errands and filled up the Accord to take to Columbus tomorrow. You also completed a near final draft for The Brothers Fourteen. Add and post. – Amorella

       1558 hours. The draft is pretty much the essence of what needs to be said in concluding the book.
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The Brothers 14 ©2016, GMG.2, rho
         It is late a cool, brisk Friday morning in March when Richard arrives at Robert and Connie’s with a “What’s up?” greeting to his brother.
         “Come on down the basement I’ve got something to show you.”
         Richard comments upon seeing the object, “The girls inherited their Grandpa Bleacher’s train set. You’ve had it up for years.”
         “But here,” says Robert, “Look underneath.”
         “The old table,” replies Richard, “it looks antique.”
         “It is smaller but looks like a section of Merlyn’s table in the story,” comments Robert. “Looking at the old legs this could be the table Merlyn leaned on at Lord Thomas. Was this the table of inspiration.’”
         Once up and standing Rich indifferently replied, “It is not a table or leg from the sixth century.  – How did the girls come by the table?
         “Their great-grandmother had a lot of antiques. She bought many of them from people in the Ohio area.” Rob paused, “I thought you would want to see it because the table and legs look like the ‘props’ when you write. I thought you’d be interested.”
         “Rob, how did you get it down here anyway?”
         “It is cut in half.”
         “You’re kidding? I never knew that,” replies Richard.
         “Someone cut it down long ago. It has a rig of wood planks and brackets underneath to hold it together. Grandpa thought it would be the ideal top for the train sets.”
         “I remember seeing the train sets when we were kids.”
         In unison, “Grandpa Bleacher’s trains were our first twin’s attraction.” They laugh.
         “Why did Grandpa Bleacher make a model of Uptown and put it at the base of a mountain? Central Ohio is a flatland if there ever was a flatland.”
         Robert notes, “Remember the model of town cemetery in the movie Beetlejuice? Grandpa Bleacher could have added a representation of the cemetery too. He easily could have gray cardboard tombstones and painted a large matchbox to be the mausoleum and the main four corners of Cemetery Way. That would have been cool, something you could have used in your book.”
         Richard chuckles and says, “I’m not going to draw any allusion to Beetlejuice. The mountain though could represent an unconscious mountain of thought.”
         Leading, Robert suggests, “Maybe the mountain symbolizes something really esoteric, or Grandpa Bleacher just wanted an excuse for some train tunnels.”
         We should have asked him about that when he was alive,” comments Richard, “now we’ll never know.”
         Connie sticks her head through the open basement door and in a very mother-like tone asks, “What are you two doing?”
         Somewhat sarcastically Robert answers, “I didn’t know you came in.”
         Richard glanced up, sees Cindy beside her, and comments more politely, “We didn’t hear you.”
         Cyndi walks half way down the steps, “You got dirt all over your shirt, Richie, what were you doing rolling on the floor?”
         “I was looking under the train table,” he retorts.
         “What were you looking for?” asks Connie. “That’s a scary table. I’d never crawl under it.”
         “Why do you say that?” wonders Robert aloud.
         “It is too old and rickety,” says Connie.
         Cyndi continues, “The whole thing could fall down. Only the legs are solid.“
         Connie continues as the sisters walk to the basement, “I heard Grandpa talking about putting a cemetery in the display. If Grandpa were alive I know where he would put it.”  She points, “Here, on the other side of the ninety degree crossing.”
         Robert chuckles in a sullen undertone, “Why the other side?”
         Grandpa said the board was a symbol of the world.”
         “Really, I didn’t know that.”
         Connie shrugs her shoulders, “You don’t know a lot of things about our Grandpa.”  
         “Like what, how is the board a symbol besides having the Living on the right side of the tracks and the Dead on the other side.”
         Connie smiled warmly in a memorable thought, “He said you have to be off track to see it.”
         “To see what?”
         “To see his display as a symbol.”
         “I know he read a lot,” says Richard, “was he into Ian Fleming?”
         “Why do you ask?”
         “If you look at the layout, you have the large oval track and an inner oval track interconnecting with another large oval figure eight track, plus a total of half a dozen or so side rails seemingly going nowhere.
         “You are reading far too much into this Richie.”
         “This was your idea, Connie.”
         The four climb the basement stairs and each step up is a step away from something easily misread.
         Once the four are in the kitchen Cyndi closes the basement door saying, “Both of you boys read too much into things and forget what reality is really about."

         In an upbeat tone Connie suggests, “Anyone up for  

home made oatmeal cookies and hot chocolate?”  

797 words

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         2333 hours. I just published Dialogue 8 on Dewdrop.

         You have some misgivings, but need not. Editing is what it is. Clarity is what is important here, the intent, tone and proper word choice are what is important. Post. - Amorella

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